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Would anyone please read and critique my personal statement? It's super rough. I know I will need to cut out 70 words just for limit, but I know there are probably all sorts of flaws in the statement itself. (Still hoping not to scrap the whole thing.) .
Edit in case it helps: Non-trad (obvs), Mexican-American, 2.9 UG (3.9 grad school, like it matters), 164 LSAT (with likely retake in December, but lack of $$)

PM ME!

Since you asked not to quote, would you rather people pm you?
It's hard to edit without quoting (though I understand and respect your request).

Yes, please PM me. I'll be updating this post in about an hour anyway. Thank you!