I took your guys' advice, I really appreciate the help. I am aware that you are not supposed to write a "why law school" essay, but at the same time I know you are supposed to tell them why you want to be a lawyer, what are your goals, and why you choose a specific school. I feel that I sum all this up in the last paragraph and it helps show that I researched the law school a little and know what I want out of it. I made adjustments on the structure so that it has more of a logical flow. Also, I took out a sentence about the fraternity, but left the other sentence in. This is because I am trying to show the admissions committee that I was a teenager looking to have fun, had a child, then made a complete turnaround from a C student that wasn't taking school seriously into a straight A (almost) student for the last two years of my undergraduate career. Please let me know what you think.
Throughout my undergraduate career, my life underwent a series of changes that would drastically impact my character. At the beginning of my junior year, I decided to join a fraternity in order to take advantage of the university experience. However, two weeks prior to my initiation, I received an unexpected phone call from my ex-girlfriend informing me that she was four months pregnant. After establishing that the child was mine, I was given the incentive to reassess my priorities and become actively engaged in my education.
While growing up, I never thought that I would become a father at a young age. Instead, I pictured the ideal scenario – one in which I had a career, a wife, and a house prior to the birth of my first child. As I began my college career at age seventeen, I spent the vast majority of my time socializing and practicing martial arts. Although I had always valued education highly, my lack of focus led to underperformance. However, once I learned I was going to become a father, I quickly gave up my favorite pastimes, but I struggled to let go of my ambitions.
I had seen my cousin give up his dreams in order to dedicate his time to raising a child, and I felt that I would be forced to do the same. Growing up with a father in prison, I promised myself at a young age that I would be there to raise my child. After learning that I was going to become a father, the idea of quitting school in order to seek employment became a viable option. While I spent the next couple weeks working up the courage to inform my parents, my mind became overwhelmed with ideas of what my life might become. Though many ideas came to mind, they all promised a grim future, much unlike what I had dreamt about as a child.
Soon enough, I informed my mother and stepfather about my situation. They had always seen my academic potential and offered to help me with the baby while I continued going to school. After visualizing a life in which I despised my job and struggled to make ends meet, I understood that this was the best decision. Accordingly, I took their advice gratefully.
On the day my daughter was born, reality set in. As I looked into her eyes for the first time, I became determined to excel in the academic arena. I chose to dedicate my time to studying, getting tutored, and visiting professors’ office hours on the days that I could not be with my daughter. I became an avid learner and saw a drastic improvement in my academic performance. Along with my new passion for education, I sought knowledge outside the classroom, primarily through leadership positions and community service. Now that my undergraduate career is coming to an end, I am eager to continue improving as a student by accepting the challenge of attending law school.
Throughout my studies of Political Science and Accounting, I have become fascinated by economic globalization. I am drawn to the XXX School of Law for a number of reasons. To begin, the diverse selection of courses in transnational, international, and comparative law offer me the best prospects of utilizing the knowledge I have acquired throughout my undergraduate studies. Moreover, I am drawn by the curriculum’s emphasis on research and legal writing, as I understand how beneficial these skills will be to my career as an attorney. The XXX School of Law is undoubtedly my first choice because it will allow me to stay in XXX to raise my daughter. She has been the primary source of my motivation thus far, and she will continue to reinforce my determination throughout law school.