My mother has never tried to shield me from the horrors of being a woman in a country like India. There are certainly horrors common to both sexes Certainly there are common horrors that do not discriminate between the sexes, like bone-breaking poverty and widespread corruption, but there are specific certain horrors are reserved explicitly for females the second sex. Every time my mother told me a new story of a gruesome rape or an abortion gone wrong, I clamped my hands over my ears and told her to stop; I knew these things happened but I did not didn't want to hear about them in detail. She never stopped telling me, however. I realized later that the anger and sorrow these stories instilled[color=#408000]**pick a better word, they made you an angry and sorrowful person? Or they made you feel anger and sorrow?** [/color]in me gave me a reason to fight.
The summer before I entered XXXX, my best friend and I went to Calcutta, India for an internship at my mother’s non-profit organization, Promise World Wide. The organization provides schooling, meals, and health benefits for the children of prostitutes. These children are labeled as "undesirables" whose status as undesirables marks them marked with a stigma that can only be erased through education. While interviewing the mothers and the children and creating a short art film about the experience, I learned discovered that the illegal practice of demanding dowries for marriage is alive and well and many of the women work grueling hours just to make enough money to marry their daughters off some day **This sentence is really long and just needs to be completely changed . While accompanying my mother to meetings about zoning restrictions for the establishment of a new school, I learned that local pimps and their gangs of violent henchmen control developments of entire neighborhoods. I also learned that a journalist was recently murdered for trying to expose the seedy underbelly of women’s hospitals. It became apparent that the rule of law is unenforced where it may be needed most. Apparently the rule of law does not exist within great chunks of India where it is needed most.
**Need a transition**India’s feminist movement has mostly addressed the needs of upper-class, educated women. Lower class women have been largely, if not completely, ignored and cannot hope for lifestyle improvement?? recourse without significant changes to the legal system. With the exceptional legal education that XXX can provide me, I hope to continue my contribute to the effort to offer these women the right to legal justice. My fluency in Bengali and intimate knowledge of Bengali culture give me a specific edge that will prove immensely beneficial in this pursuit. Throughout college I have tried to squeeze out every drop of education I can, often signing up for the maximum number of units possible and taking multiple courses every summer. On top of regularly participating in Bengali cultural programs singing Rabindrasangeet, I have been a constant member of the art and writing community of San Diego and have taken part in various art shows and poetry readings, some of which I have helped to organize. I plan to complete two theses in my senior year, one being a feminist anthology of poetry and the other an examination of the American media response to the 1971 atrocities in Bangladesh. **The above information sounds a bit too much like resume reciting. They know what you have done, and what is on your transcript. Most of it doesn't really jive with your message.
Living in Having lived in Calcutta for the first six years of my life has made me acutely aware of my privileged birth. If I were born two houses down the road, in all probability I would never have touched a guitar or tasted sausages. If I was not But if I weren’t born in India at all I would have never played a harmonium or tasted those tiny, sweet bananas the size of my thumb. Nor would I would not have seen well-educated women be judged solely on the fairness of their skin, or the bruised eyes of a woman whose hard-earned pay gets wasswilled down with cheap whiskey. Bleeding heart aside, I do not suppose that I can single-handedly change these pervasive circumstances, but I only hope to bolster the crumbling legal system that India reluctantly provides its underclass citizens. Having A top-notch education from XXX, in a country with endless resources can only help me on this undertaking.
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**I may or may not have gotten confused with colors . . .
Take this for what it is worth, a stranger reading your PS. I just think it could be more concise and the information could be tailored to yourself a bit more.