It seems a bit disjointed, like you're trying to cram a bunch of stuff in w/out giving proper due to any of it. You go from your time abroad to why you want to go to law school to how you can now answer questions in class. Nothing sticks or leaves much of an impression. Remember, lots and lots of people have similar experiences, especially applying to Tier 1 schools (assuming you are applying to T1). No offense, but nothing in this draft really sets you apart.
If I were you I would focus on one issue you faced in the Philippines discuss it in a bit more detail, and then use that to segue into why you want to go to law school. Cut out the bits about answering questions; it's superfluous fluff.
Good luck on subsequent drafts!
Those are good notes and I appreciate them. Thanks